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　　Among　all　the　worthy　feelings　of　mankind,　love　is　probably　the　noblest.　It　is　of　the　utmost　importance　to　the　human　beings.　Everybody　not　only　needs　love,　but　also　should　give　love.
　　As　is　described　in　the　picture,　"love　is　a　lamp　which　is　brighter　in　darker　places."　This　is　indeed　true.　People　in　darker　places　need　more　light　than　ordinary　people.　Maybe　even　a　dim　light　can　give　them　much　hope　for　a　better　life　and　progress.　Maybe　just　a　thread　of　light　will　call　forth　their　strength　and　courage　to　step　out　of　their　difficulties.
　　For　instance　when　someone　is　starving　to　death,　just　a　little　food　and　water　from　you　may　save　his　life.　Or　when　a　little　girl　in　a　poor　rural　area　drops　out　of　school　because　of　poverty,　just　a　small　sum　of　money　from　you　may　support　her　to　finish　her　schooling　and　change　her　life,　you　have　given　love　which　is　like　a　lamp　in　a　dark　place　where　light　is　most　need无忧论文 【http://www.uklunwen.com】ed.
　　So　to　sum　up,　we　should　offer　our　help　to　all　who　are　in　need.　We　expect　to　get　love　from　others　and　we　also　give　love　to　others　so　when　you　see　someone　in　difficulty　or　in　distress　and　in　need　of　help,　don't　hesitate　to　give　your　love　to　him.　I　believe　then　the　relationship　between　people　will　be　harmonious　and　our　society　will　be　a　better　place　for　us　to　live　in.
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修正版：
　　Love　is　of　utmost　importance　to　us　humans.　Everybody　not　only　needs　love　but　should　also　give　others　love.　As　can　be　seen　from　the　picture,　love　is　a　lamp　which　is　brighter　in　darker　places.　This　is　indeed　true.　People　in　darker　places　need　more　light　than　others.　Maybe　even　a　dim　light　can　give　them　much　hope　for　a　better　life.　Maybe　just　a　thread　of　light　will　call　forth　their　strength　and　courage　to　help　them　step　out　of　their　difficulties.
　　Numerous　examples　might　be　easily　given,　but　these　will　suffice.　For　instance,　when　someone　is　starving　to　death,　just　a　little　food　and　water　may　save　his　or　her　life.　Again,　when　a　little　girl　in　a　poor　rural　area　drops　out　of　school　because　of　poverty,　just　a　small　sum　of　money　from　you　may　support　her　to　finish　school　and　change　her　life.　In　these　circumstances,　you　may　have　given　love　which　is　like　a　lamp　in　a　dark　place　where　light　was　most　needed.
　　To　sum　up,　we　should　offer　our　help　to　all　the　needy.　We　expect　to　get　love　from　other